The Suffocating Effects of 9-11

Good- I think the writer of this research paper did a pretty good job of researching certain aspects of this topic. Throughout the paper she gives many statistics that show how much she is really interested in her topic. Her quotes are backed up by many real life examples of people that have been effected by toxic air, which brings in the pathos and grabs the reader. Because the writer strongly emphasis the corruptness of the government and EPA, one can tell how emotionally involved they became while writing this paper. 

I also found that this writer had little punctuation and grammatical errors. The overall paper is written in a pretty easy to read way. I don't mean because of the actual content but you dont have to be a rocket scientist to follow this paper. 

bad- I had a major problem finishing reading this paper. The first paragraph was overwhelmingly long and doesnt end until page two. Break that up! There are many instances like where the writer begins to talk about the EPA where you could clearly start a new paragraph about specifics about why it was not safe, even though the EPA confirmed that it was. The opening paragraph seems more like a summary of the whole paper than an intro. Just break it up a little. I also had a lot of trouble finding what the actual purpose of this research paper was. There is no specific thesis. This paper could easily have ended after the first paragrapgh because the rest of the paper is just repeating what the intro says.